You have excellent syntax, and that's rare for journaling. I tell fiction folk if they want their work to be credible, get an undergrad in Journalism. Minimalism is the key and no one trims their stories better than a journalist. I may also be biased. I identify with your highlights, almost too much. Scary close, I might add. I would say good work, but "Good syntax and skills" seems a more fitting compliment. You passed good work in the second graf. Off to sub ya, now.
You have excellent syntax, and that's rare for journaling. I tell fiction folk if they want their work to be credible, get an undergrad in Journalism. Minimalism is the key and no one trims their stories better than a journalist. I may also be biased. I identify with your highlights, almost too much. Scary close, I might add. I would say good work, but "Good syntax and skills" seems a more fitting compliment. You passed good work in the second graf. Off to sub ya, now.
Post-script: I listened as I read.